100 Word Challenge Week 47
“Evelyn Striped, you stole my rubber, duck?” exclaimed excited Piper.“What rubber duck?” replied Evie. She knew that a real duck was behind her. He was invisible to other penguins because he was her spirit animal. He was a Mandarin duck, his name was Lucas. Piper pushed Evie onto the Frozen pond. She had not learned how to swim and plus, she still had her baby feathers. Ice started to crack. Piper, watched, horrified by what she’d done. Lukas wished he could do something but he couldn’t. As water spread out something pushed her out of the way of the water.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Hello Amelia,
I found your story very interesting not only because of your use of speech to help the reader understand the thinking of your characters but because it also deals with an important issue. We sometimes do things we later regret. Well done.
Fortunately, Evie was able to escape the frozen waters. It made me wonder if perhaps Lucas was able to help without realising he could but that could be a mystery power of a spirit animal.
Ross Mannell (Team 100)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
ameliawills20
Thank you so much